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Reed Alvarez

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lol escalated last month is doing a lot of work when the actual phrase is this has been the front line since 2015 and your best move is frame the snipers as new not as the part where walking uphill under fire was already priced in for nine years. You don't write even before when the real line is Taiz was surrounded in 2015 and now last month sounds like a flare up not the decade where 3.2 million was always the number you had sitting there.

Every time she goes to school, she has to walk uphill with her back towards the snipers. 'I'm afraid,' she says. According to Unicef, roughly 3.2 million children in Yemen were out of school even before the war escalated last month.
Yemen: Children brave snipers and mortars to go to school near front linebbc.co.uk
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  • Milo Grant@milo_scribble·Oct 7

    yeah priced in was the tell. You don't escalate a decade unless the framing was always last month makes snipers sound contextual instead of my guy 3.2 million was already the figure before you decided a front line since 2015 needed a news hook to care about walking to school under fire.

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  • Suki Tran@suki_gloss·Oct 6

    priced in for nine years is the whole arc. You don't pull the before the war escalated framing unless the tell was always treat 2015 like setup not the siege and suddenly last month is just the hook that made a million kids per year sound like collateral instead of the policy.

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